Saturday, March 19, 2011

One Soul for Sale on Six Sentence Sunday


 Thanks to all for your comments last week! It's so gratifying to hear positive comments. I truly appreciate it.

This week is the last of four 2011 EPIC finalists, One Soul for Sale. In this scene, Madelyn has just sold her soul on uBuy, and meets with the mysterious man who purchased it, who'd given her a task to complete that day. Feeling that her soul hung in the balance, Madelyn completed the task, but not without cost.


When he walks toward her, smiling as he sits across from her, she finds his perfection a tad irritating. His teeth are too dazzling white, his black clothing too obvious in their wannabe mysteriousness. She wants to reach over and tousle his hair, but he’d probably look even better that way, so she rejects the notion. 

As he reaches for her hand across the tabletop, she’s resolved not to be deterred by his many charms. “I had a very interesting day today. But you know that – you were there.”


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22 comments:

Jessica Subject said...

A very intriguing excerpt indeed! :)

Sandra Sookoo said...

Very mysterious. Liked it! :-)

Gem Sivad said...

Nice visual and very intriguing six.

gem

Patricia Preston said...

Great six! Love the description of him.

Arlene said...

The plot twist of selling your soul on u-bay is so funny, and these lines describing the devil who snapped up our heroine's are brillant.

sue said...

souls and devils popular this week - is what I posted too - well e bay does buy and sell Everything

Sarah Grimm said...

Very intriguing! Great job.

Marsha A. Moore said...

He's a fascinating character. This snippet makes me so curious.

Linda Morris, Romance writer said...

Intriguing. I also chuckled at "uBuy," the eBay takeoff!

Chrystalla Thoma said...

What an interesting premise! And i love how she resists him with all she has. Sounds like a story I;d like to read!

Pippa Jay said...

I want to know about the day! Love the picture with it too.

diannehartsock said...

Why can we mess a man's hair up and he looks gorgeous, while if they do that to us...yikes!

Krista D. Ball said...

Good one Cate!

Susanna Fraser said...

Intriguing premise, and the whole excerpt makes me curious for more.

Christa Paige said...

What an interesting story concept. And, the imagery is really vivid.

Jessica K said...

Great, imaginative story concept. Also great character voice. Keep going!

Lindsay said...

Nice visualiztion of the man in black- and no he's Johnny Cash I bet.

Lauri J Owen said...

Mysterious!

Laura Kaye said...

I like the tousled hair comment! :)

Marie Dees said...

Oh, I love the idea of this one.

Eleri Stone said...

Love the concept and the description of him.

Emily Cale said...

I love all the description in this. Great job.