Sunday, May 15, 2011

California dreamin' for Six Sentence Sunday

Thanks so much to everyone who drops by each week! Sundays feel like a blog party. :) I love reading your comments, and especially reading everyone else's entries.

This week, I'm sharing six from my newly released historical, San Francisco Dreams, set during the 1906 earthquake there. The heroine, Norah Hawkins, is a feisty girl, necessary due to her unfortunate circumstances. To set up this snippet, she's about to leave her terrible past behind, but while waiting for her train to San Francisco, runs into the snake-tongued biddy who's made her life miserable for too long. Payback is sweet. :)

“Finery can’t disguise a…” Mrs. Hathaway whispered the last. “…hussy.”
“Mm.” Norah slowly scanned the woman’s barrel-like form. “Why Martha, for once, I do believe you’re right. Honestly, a woman of your age shouldn’t wear rouge.” 
The biddy resembled a chicken that had lost its squawk. 

Tomorrow I'm starting a new blog series called First Chapters, and will be posting -- you guessed it -- the first chapter of San Francisco Dreams. I hope you'll stop by. Norah's not done with old Martha yet. :)

41 comments:

AllureVanSanz said...

LOVE this premise, love the six, such a great job! Kudos.

Best,
Allure

Jessica Subject said...

Well, she found a way to stop her flapping tongue. Great six!

Arlene said...

Ha ha, chicken that lost its squawk, I love it. Add in the fact this is set in 1906, how perfect the lines are. I gotta read this one asap, Cate, great choice of a clip to lure me in.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Great come-back. Heroine with backbone. You go, Norah!

Jenna Jaxon said...

Love the flow of the dialogue and the last line is priceless! Excellent six!

Lisa Fox said...

San Francisco is one my my favorite cities. She chose a great place to start over.

Luxie Ryder said...

Love the description. Great six!

Bri Clark said...

Love it...growing up in the south words like biddy and hussy are still a part of my vocab

Sherry Gloag said...

Fabulous comeback fro Norah. I can never think of one when I need it, and a hundred when it's far too late!

Carolyn Rosewood said...

Great dialogue!

sue said...

I love payback ! The biddy resembled a chicken that had lost its squawk.
I'm taking a humour writing class - should use this as an example - really good !

Meg said...

WOW - love the comeback, LOL! LOVE this historical era and area. Can't wait to read it! :-D

Jean Davis said...

Awesome comeback! Love the chicken lost its squawk line.

Zee Monodee said...

Love payback!! Good one, Cate. :)

Jessica K said...

Revenge sure is sweet when the biddy loses her squawk. Expertly done!

Sandra Sookoo said...

lol loved it! I think we all know folks like that!

Shannan Albright said...

Loved your spunky Nora. Great six sentence.

Liz said...

This was great! Love the description of 'barrel like form' and how your heroine turn the tables!

Viviane Brentanos said...

great, caustic come-back. I like it

Patricia Preston said...

Love your heroine and the setting!

D L Jackson said...

Love it. Don't we all wish we could quip up with a comeback like that when dealing with a bully?
Nice show of the time.

Gem Sivad said...

Very nice comeback and how sweet the moment was!

Ginger Simpson said...

I swear you could write a menu and hook readers. :) You know I'm already a fan.

Jayel Kaye said...

I love it when the old hags are put in their place. Well done

Graylin Fox said...

HeeHee. Took the squawk right out of her! I love spunky!

Kim said...

Great premise and I love the different time period! Great six!

Felicia said...

Very nice. I can't wait to see what happens next!

Susanna Fraser said...

Oh, NICE. I like Norah. And I do love a San Francisco historical--I'm not so much a fan of Westerns per se, but I'm always glad to find a West-Coast-ern.

Liana Brooks said...

Love it! Fabulous Voice, I'd love to read more. :o)

diannehartsock said...

It's nice to see her standing up for herself, especially to someone who's been cruel to her in the past. Go, girl!

Lindsay said...

Love the six and how you started on a serious note then threw in the line from Norah which the old biddy probably didn't even understand.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Loved the comeback!

Kim Knox said...

lmao, love this :)

lexcade said...

I already love Norah. Great six!

Roberta Walker said...

Ha ha! Nice comeback!

charmainegordon author said...

Delightful six, Cate. Thanks.

the cautionary tale said...

I snickered when I read this! I love snappy comebacks! Great 6!

Skylar Kade said...

What a unique time period! Your dialogue really captured it.

Sandy Nachlinger said...

Good comeback. This sounds like a fun book.

Devin said...

Haha. "Burn!" as we said in my younger days.

J.A. Beard said...

Nothing like a little verbal riposte.