Sunday, August 14, 2011

Probing SSS

Yay, it's Six Sentence Sunday again. Welcome back for another round of fun. Thanks to all who stop by, and especially for your comments!

Here's another peek at Dead to Rights, my dark paranormal. Creepy bodyguards scan the crowd during a gathering of the New Day Order, the cult our heroine must join in order to learn her identity: 

When one caught my gaze, it seared through me like a laser, its heat searching. Asking silent questions, ones to which I had no answer. Or answers he wouldn’t like.
The shock of his inescapable probe held me captive for unbearable moments as Cunningham droned on about weeding out the chaff from the wheat.
And I suspected they’d just labeled me as chaff. I had a funny feeling they burned it.

31 comments:

Sherry Gloag said...

You draw me in with this snippet. So many questions about the guy watching her. Love your word choices in this.

Jessica Subject said...

You left me wanting to read more. Great six!

jabelfield said...

Nice analogies in here, Cate. :)

Taryn Kincaid said...

Such an interesting twist that she must join a cult to learn her identity -- it's usually the other way around!

lizculver said...

This was intense and unsettling. You've really captured her discomfort.

Gem Sivad said...

Oooh, very disturbing. Great mood setting in this six!

Sandra Sookoo said...

Oooh, interesting concept. Loved it!

Marie Dees said...

Oh, that's great tension in a six!

charmainegordon author said...

Intriguing. Reader wants more.

Gayle Ramage said...

Fantastic snippet, and intriguing story premise.

laynap said...

Um where's the rest. Need. More.

Great six Cate!

Zee Monodee said...

This is creepy, and then the last line - chaff! Brilliant!

J.A. Beard said...

Okay, that's all sorts of creepy. Very compelling.

Jenna said...

Very creepy line--"I had the funny feeling they burned it." Shivers. Can't wait for more! Great six!

Bree said...

Yikes! Gotta watch out for those alien probes. Scary six!

Paula Martin said...

Intriguing and so scary for her. I felt her fear.

Ginger Simpson said...

Great six, Cate. The hook at the end definitely piqued interest. I wanna know what category she falls into. *smile* You never disappoint.

Joanne Stewart said...

Very vivid snippet. And I definitely want more.

Lindsay said...

That's an intense six.

Jessica K said...

I think she'll be the wheat. They might eat her, but she's better than chaff!

Kerrianne Coombes said...

Uh oh! More please! Fab six

Carrie Ann Ryan said...

I really want to know more! Great six!

Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) said...

Great six! Sounds like she's in real trouble!

Sandy Nachlinger said...

I love your comparison to "wheat and chaff" and how you kept it going with "labeled me as chaff." Good writing.

Vivien Dean said...

I really love how this ended. Definitely keeps me interested in both what is going on and in the characters as a whole.

Laura Kaye said...

Great build-up in those six! Enjoyed!

diannehartsock said...

This story is becoming creepier by the minute! Love this six. Wonder who she'll turn out to be.

Kathleen Grieve said...

This Six left me needing to know so much more! Nice way to hook me!

Jayel Kaye said...

OH this was really good. I loved the last line.Gives you an idea of the cult mentality right off.

Lucy Felthouse said...

Wow, sounds great! Can't wait to read more :)

Pippa Jay said...

Oooo, being chaff is definitely BAD!