Sunday, July 31, 2011

Who are you?

Thanks to everyone who stops by each week! Especially for your comments. I love reading your snippets!

Here's another six from my dark paranormal, Dead to Rights. Our heroine has some strange experiences in a world she doesn’t know, and can’t even recognize herself in the mirror:


Like the first time I’d caught my reflection in the bathroom. I’d said, Excuse me, thinking another patient stood in front of me. When no response came, I stared for the longest time, unable to process that the eyes I looked through were set in the face looking back at me. I still had no clue who that person staring out from the mirror was. Not me, that was for damn sure. The mousy, shoulder-length brown hair matched mousier brown eyes set in a round face – the sight still stunned me.

35 comments:

lizculver said...

Unsettling six. The thought of not recognizing yourself is quite a nightmarish premise - interesting six.

Sarah Grimm said...

Wow, I can't imagine not recognizing myself in the mirror. Definitely nightmarish. Well done!

Gem Sivad said...

Intriguing six and definitely makes me want to know more. Great snippet!

Alix said...

I totally agree with Liz, it is very unsettling but so intriguing. Great six!

Kacey Hammell said...

Nice and intriguing, attention grabber that is for sure! I want! :D

Sherry Gloag said...

Oh spooky, spooky, spooky. I wonder how 'they' changed the colour of her eyes?

Liz said...

intriguing! what to know more.....!!!!

Sandra Sookoo said...

Hmm, I wonder how she came to be in that body? Nice six!

Paula Martin said...

Intriguing - and very disturbing for her too!

Lisa Fox said...

Wow, that's unsettling.

Carrie Ann Ryan said...

I just got chills. So mysterious and intriguing! Nice six!

Rebecca Royce said...

Oh my gosh. This really makes me want to read more. Holy cow.

Eleri Stone said...

You pretty much had me at dark paranormal : ) Interesting setup.

Jayel Kaye said...

very intriguing and unsettling. I am loving this story

E. P. Beaumont said...

Something has been misplaced: we know what it looks like but it isn't there, even when looking right at it. Worse, looking right at it in the mirror.

Jessica K said...

Amazing scene. The longer she can't believe it, the more I want to read the rest of the story.

Jenna said...

That would have to be the most unsettling and freaky thing to have happen. But that feeling of unease makes the reader want more. Well, I do. Great six.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Intriguing and disquieting. Would not like to be her right now!

Zee Monodee said...

Gosh, I felt right there seeing through her eyes in this excerpt. Very well done, Cate!

Anonymous said...

There are days I wish I didn't know who was in the mirror ;) I keep forgetting how old I am.

Thanks for sharing!
Lyncee

Laura Kaye said...

Whoa that's really intriguing!

1000th.monkey said...

I don't know why, but it makes me think of those scary stories about staring at the mirror at midnight and saying 'bloody marry' three times and she'll appear behind you... definitely unsettling

Lindsay said...

Deeply unsettling six. To look upon yourself and not know. That's chilling

diannehartsock said...

What's going on here? That would be a terrifying experience. I'd feel very lost...

Bree said...

Very terrifying six! I can't imagine how horrible that would be.

Susan Gourley/Kelley said...

Another great six. You pick such interesting little pieces.

gayleramage said...

Oh, this sounds like a really intriguing story. Need to keep my eye on this one. Great snippet.

Sonya Clark said...

"Unsettling" is the perfect word for this! You do a great job creating that feeling. Great six!

Stacey said...

Oh, wow, intriguing!! Nice six!

J.A. Beard said...

Not recognizing yourself is one of the creepiest things I can think of. Very nice.

Pippa Jay said...

Disturbing not to recognize yourself. But intriguing to know why she doesn't.

For Your Eyes Only~Author Lani Rhea said...

Very intriguing, Cate. I can only imagine what she is going through. Well done! Great six!

Kathleen Grieve said...

You do a great job capturing the bewilderedness of not recognizing oneself in the mirror!

Benjamin Tiberius Russell said...

I echo all the previous comments, it would be quite scary to look in a mirror and not recognize the face staring back at you. That's a really cool six sentence teaser - I like it.

Jynnipher Olbert said...

Very interesting and agree with Kacey. Definitely a grabber!